Respond to "Revising (Real-World Writers)"

 

 

The art of good writing requires revisions as discussed on the YouTube video "Revising (Real-World Writers). While some people worry about writing the first draft, it is important to put your thoughts on paper with the full expectation that you will revise them later. A central theme in the video was how crucial revising your work can be to the overall success of your writing. I found it interesting, however, to hear that not everyone approaches revisions the same. For example, Charles Johnson usually writes two or three drafts before he is done writing. David Guterson, on the other hand, rereads his writing and revises as he goes. I am still early into the process of becoming a good writer and do not know what style I will adopt. But I have learned the importance of doing revisions and will be sure to revise my work so that my writing can improve.

Summary and my opinion of Sherry Turkle's NYT article "Stop Googling. Let's Talk"

The article "Stop Googling. Let's Talk." written by Sherry Turkle and published in the New York Times discusses the state of conversation in today's generation.  Nowadays, many children and teenagers' attention spans do not last very long as they are tempted to reach for their phones to go online, text other people, play a game, check email, etc.  Using phones very often has a big influence on people's behavior. It can also impact relationships. This has hurt their ability to interact and properly communicate with other people face-to-face.  No longer can they empathize or read the body language of the other people they are interacting with -  so much so that they do not even know when they are hurting the feelings of another peer.  The author claims that we are treating communication as an "app" - that we expect the person we are communicating with to respond immediately and efficiently.  However, we know that true communication takes time, and the little details of conversation is where the true communication exists.  It is not just words that we speak to each other, but true conversation takes time to develop.

I agree with the author's opinion. Using phones can change people's behavior especially children's and teenager's behavior. Having been an au pair before, I can see that many children and teenager nowadays are "communicating" through their cellphones, and it is important to restrict their usage so that they understand how to communicate in person.  The parents and I have set rules for the children so that they do not use their phones during dinner time and are required to actually talk to us about their day and what has happened at school.  It is with hope that these rules will have some influence on their sense of normal communication methods and will allow them to be able to communicate better with other people in the future. I think there is also a big difference when adults are using phones and children are using the phones. Most of the time adults are able to control their behavior and it's more difficult for children. This is especially true when teenagers begin to develop emotionally and they have to figure out how to act with friends and family in deep relationships. On the other hand I believe that FaceTime, Skype and WhatsApp are giving great possibilities to stay in touch with friends and family all over the world. I think we have to find a balance between talking to people face-to-face and communicating via phones and computers.

My opinion of George Yancy's NYT letter "Dear White America"

George Yancy's NYT letter "Dear White America" is very thought provoking. I disagree that every white person is a racist and every man is a sexist.

What about gay men - Are gay men sexists?  George Yancy's says on page 4 paragraph 1 "So, every day of my life I fight against the dominant male narrative, choosing to see women as subjects, not objects".  He wants to point out that men see women as objects. But I don't think that this is right. Why should gay men see women as objects. They are not attracted to them. Even the opposite, they are more able to understand women and their suffering.

Another question occurred to me.   If I were to live in Africa wouldn't the black community be racist toward me because I am white?
 
Although I am a white female and therefore a racist in the author's eyes, I believe that I try to be open and accepting of all races.  I think his advice to be self-reflective is good (no matter what the issue you are reflecting upon), but that the results of the self-reflection (whether one believes they are truly racist or not) should be respected.  Some may truly believe that they are not racist even though the color of their skin is white.  Ultimately, I believe love, acceptance, communication and understanding are really necessary in order to conquer racial issues in a society.

In conclusion, I believe that his letter is a very interesting moral and emotional challenge for us all to think about.

Summary of George Yancy's NYT letter "Dear White America"

The letter "Dear White America" that George Yancy writes in the New York Times is aimed at all the white people in America.  His belief is that the society has been set up to be one that is racist and therefore a white person is racist by merely existing and benefiting in that society and continuing to further the racial injustice.  The author tries to equate the systems of racism with white people and sexism with men.  He says that although he tries to not be sexist, the fact that he is a man in a society that is sexist against women makes him guilty of being sexist.  In the same way, a white person who exists in today's racist society makes that person guilty of racism. He says that white people have many privileges.

My reading process AFTER reading The Norton Field Guide

In the past I’ve used some of the reading strategies which are mentioned in the Norton Field Guide. I consider these strategies very important and they have helped me save a lot of time by using them.  My ability to remember important facts has improved as a result. I’ve used the annotation mentioned on page 400 to highlight ideas I’ve thought to be impressive as well as notes and keywords.

I think that all the reading process strategies which are mentioned in The Norton Flied Guide are helpful and useful.  Different reading strategies are useful for different texts, but I also have to mention that I think that it is hard to learn some of them because they are very time consuming. It also depends on the importance of the information which you need to remember.

What is also very interesting for me is the coding system on page 401. The coding system is a system where you have little symbols which have larger meanings that you infer from the symbol itself. In the future I am going to use these codes to mark text that I read. Symbols like a star and a check mark will help me to immediately see the important parts. Other symbols like the a “-“ will show me what isn’t important in the text so I can skip over it in the future. I really think that I will try it the next time that I am going to read a text. It is a very fast system which allows you to take a quick note on the side of the paper so you are not losing time with writing words or sentences. It’s a quick visual aid to help me know what’s on a page. Sometimes when I write sentences I forget where I stopped reading and I have to repeat the sentence I already read. The reading process would be faster if I used a code to mark where I left off.

It is mentioned in the book at page 404 how helpful it is to reread a text. I have to agree with this point of view since I sometimes use this strategy. Firstly, I get though the text very fast to have a basic knowledge about the topic. When I reread the text I am looking for the most important details. It is a challenge for me to find out what is important. It is like finding a needle in a haystack.  I am motivated to find out the main points and be successful.

In conclusion, I believe I will benefit if I use some of these strategies.

My reading process BEFORE I read The Norton Field Guide

My reading process:

Reading is one of my favorite hobbies and I especially love to read at Starbucks because of the smell of cookies and coffee. The background noise of people and espresso makers is soothing while I read. I’ve always loved to read all kind of books, newspapers, comics and especially magazines.  I adore reading history books. It gives me the ability to understand other cultures, the viewpoint of different generations and why things are the way they are today. It is not hard to stay focused when the book is interesting.  I believe that it is a good habit and necessary for me to be successful.

The first thing that I do before I start reading is to see if there are any pictures in the book or magazine. I really enjoy taking the time to look for them and playing with my imagination when I see a picture that could inspire a story. I find it exciting to anticipate what the book or story will be like. If I see a graphic representation, I am often able to remember it better. It is the tension of a book which gives me the joy in reading it. The joy to read it is sometimes so intense that I read as fast as I can because I am so excited to know the end of the story. In general I really don’t like to stop reading when I am in the middle of a story.

I believe that knowledge is power. When I start reading I am looking for powerful words with lots of meaning and words which I sometimes don’t know or don’t understand. I am almost always searching words in the internet. I love using technology and it fascinates me how quickly it improves. Being able to save so much time by using technology is very helpful. This gives me the incentive and motivation to read the whole book because I love to expand my vocabulary. If I don’t know a word I search for it. I like to have control over what I learn. I really like to know at least a little bit about a subject before I read more in depth. I enjoy getting the gist of a story.

I have two different ways that I read. One of them is to read the text very fast and skim over it. I am doing it only to understand the basics of what the story is.  When I am done with this, I read and review the text at a normal speed. Because of my previous knowledge from skimming it is easier for me to be focused on the important details and their connections and associations.

The other way that I read is to read the text slowly, make notes in the book and highlight the text. This lets me concentrate efficiently on the facts and main points of the text. I also enjoy writing post-it notes and sticking them in the book to mark important passages. That’s a good way to save time.  It is important for me to absorb as much important information as possible.

 

Martin Luther King's Letter from Birmingham Jail

Martin Luther King’s letter from Birmingham Jail is difficult for me to read because he has an unusual writing style. He uses  vocabulary I don't know yet to express his point of view; for example, words like “secretaries (paragraph 1), cognizant (paragraph 3), interrelatedness (paragraph 4), affluent (paragraph10), disobey (paragraph12), disobedience (paragraph 15)”. His writing was very controversial for the time which makes him an impressive person.  On the one hand he is writing like a politician and is expressing his opinion but on the other hand he is trying to encourage other people to think about his words and act. Martin Luther King’s writing style is on a very high level which shows that he is well educated. This helps get his point across and makes his letter successful.  The way he uses a phrase followed immediately by the opposite phrase is confusing; for example: “injustice anywhere is a threat to justice everywhere”.

I think that it was a little bit hard for me to understand one of his examples (paragraph 2) because he is giving a citation from the bible of what a prophet said. I feel it's easy to be confused at first why he is writing this and what the connection is between his letter and this example.

He structured the letter in a specific way to engage people to think about his words and to change the racial attacks against negros. His purpose is to show people in that time that not every one in the USA is united. It could be difficult to understand because not everyone has the knowledge of what exactly happened at his time.

 

 

What makes his letter successful is his strong belief that he can change  peoples views; especially white peoples opinion . I think that he uses great sentence structure. He points out what other people say, "they say" and is representing the importance of his, "I say" beliefs. The way he writes is very creative. I feel that it is easy to understand his point of view , his goals and who he wants to encourage. Martin Luther King is showing an introduction, examples, facts, middle part and a conclusion in his letter. The letter's tone is polite, strong and respectful. He is using a specific structure in his letter. The most important thing in this letter is that he shows the history of the time in which he lived.

Martin Luther King writes very controversially and originally. His letter makes me feel emotional and to want to share my opinion. It is a wonderful letter which opens many people's eyes and which changed the world at this time. He is describing and combining  people's rights, their beliefs, god and politics together. His letter stands out and is very important for many people.

 

Welcome to my Blog :)

                                                              Hi all :)

My name is Jessica Czakon. I am from Aachen, Germany. It is a beautiful city near Cologne and only 15 minutes from Netherlands, 10 minutes from Belgium and 2 hours from France. I started learning English 2 years ago. Most German people learn French and Dutch as a second language.
This is my first English class at Foothill and I am very excited to learn how to write more original and on a deeper level. It is also one of my new years goals :) going more often to the gym would be the second goal but I am still not sure if I will accomplish it.

One of my favorite hobbies is dancing Salsa but I also enjoy going out with my friends and doing outdoor activities. For example I like to go hiking, surfing and running. My motivation for running is to do a marathon. I moved to California in January and I believe that this state is the perfect place for so many different types of activities. American food is very different than German food. German portions are small, healthy and taste delicious. That is the reason why I like to cook German dishes in my free time.

Happy New Year and I hope we will have a great time together :)

Best,
Jessica